Fresh
Deep
Brown
Earthy.
The sweet smell of life
Rushing to a silent call;
Like a lover to another
Sweet collision
Music divine.
Pure
Rich
Dark
True.
The ancient tune
That plays eternal
Unchanged, still true
As the first day
His first note broke
From the heavens
And rushed
To the yearning call
Of his lover below.
Peace,
At last.
Bound Together
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Bound together in blood and sin
An odd couple really, the mother and the leader
Death made the introduction, arranging their first encounter
Shock and loss...
2 days ago
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Well written, the imagery almost evoked the sounds and feelings of your title, nice
There is something that just works about your run-off lines. At first it was interfering with my experience by creating urgency. Then I realised the poet was so immersed (excuse that pun) in the rain feeling, he did not need many words to recreate it. I like it now - a whole lot.
True, imagery just evokes the scenery. I like your poetry a lot. :)
This poem put me at ease the whole way through... Well done for an awesome effect.
congratulations!! this isnt sickening and corny! (a first for you i'm sure)
-BABArosa
Thanks Myne...I wrote it on a rainy night :)
Thanks NYA! Your words always find some way to inflate my already you-inflated ego :D
Oh Juanita! You just flatter me too much....I'm thinking I should do more writing in the rain ;)
Thanks Tade, blame it on the rain...Your awesome for thinking it's awesome ;)
Bastardess! As for you, I will take the congratulations, but I refuse to mind you :)
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